Saturday, August 21, 2010

Sentence structure and grammatical help. Editing help. Any advice on restructuring this sentence?

';Offers tips on cheap and free products and services in New York City as well as advice on getting by on a tight budget.';





Any grammar and sentence structure help? It is a description. Thanks!Sentence structure and grammatical help. Editing help. Any advice on restructuring this sentence?
well you have an incomplete sentence.





what offers tips on cheap.....?





once you add a subject to the begining of the sentence it would be ok





ex: Yahoo offers tips on cheap and free...


or


Offers tips on...tight budget, yahoo is the best service.Sentence structure and grammatical help. Editing help. Any advice on restructuring this sentence?
She offers tips on cheap, free products and services in New York City, as well as, advice on getting by on a tight budget.


By adding- she you are adding a subject


by adding comma you will not have to use the word --and- repetitively as they both describe the word products


also please insert commas before and after phrase-- as well as
It would sound a whole lot better with the subject included, and I would make a few minor changes:





XXXX offers tips on cheap, free products and services as well as advice on getting by on a tight budget in New York City.
it is an incomplete sentence
It's not a sentence. You have no subject!


It reminds me of ';Eats shoots and leaves';.

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